Kellan

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Vital Statistics
Gender : Male
Age : Unkown
Personality : Calm, self-absorbed
Speciality : Superhuman strength.

Quick Bio
Spewed out from a wormhole at the beginning of time and left to perish in the cold wasteland that is space. Managed to survive and harness control over his powers ultimately destroying everything that stood in his way. His main focus is on how powerful he is, being the most powerful being in the universe is his primary target. His Superhuman abilities give him control over all lesser beings, bringing them to cower in fear. The claws of time have no effect on him, his age and true origin are unknown.


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Glorgoth

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Mon Oct 13 1:36:48 EDT 2008

Just a quick critique: Your brief description is creative enough, but perhaps would be best placed under Bio, as it's more a story of origin than a description. Also, on age, unknown would be more appropriate than N/A (which stands for not applicable). I'd like to see you give your brief description, move what you've got to quick bio, and build on it. My guess is you've got the talent to make it a good quick read.

~Retired Geezer~

Kellan

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Mon Oct 13 11:34:34 EDT 2008

oh, i've always read N/a as Not Available so to me it made sense, but sure to both comments.


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Mon Oct 13 11:48:11 EDT 2008

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oh, i've always read N/a as Not Available so to me it made sense, but sure to both comments.


I always took it to mean Not Applicable too(smiley) Not that it's of vital importance though.


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Kellan

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Mon Oct 13 11:56:33 EDT 2008

In creative writing everything is important!
Luckily i'm not creative (smiley)